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Track 13 by ~deadlypoison695:icondeadlypoison695:

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Silently crying the tears of regret
While dancing with shadows on white painted walls
Screaming at echoes of porcelain dreams
Praying that nightmares will soon hear my calls

Stripping off layers and masks of deceit
Exposing the black and white truth in my lies
Tattooing the pain on my tattered, black soul
Sewing my lips shut to silence my cries

Acidic disease running fresh through my veins
Igniting the fire that flows through my heart



again, I know it's not finished, but now I might just have the inspiration to finish it...
©2004-2009 ~deadlypoison695
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Author's Comments

For lack of a better title, Track 13 was the song I had on repeat while I wrote this at 2 in the morning.

Yes, I realize that this isn't finished, but so many people were asking when I was going to post again, that when I started ANOTHER poem that I couldn't finish, I didn't just want to put it in my pile of unfinished-ness. I'm hoping that posting it here will give me some inspiration to finish it soon since I think this is the first half decent anything I've written since Porcelain Doll.

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~graymatter Nov 28, 2004, 10:13:25 AM
The poem's quite good. Is it meant to be one long running verse, or was that done unintentionally? At the moment, it has a rhythm to it that doesn't really suit the tone and that's mainly because there is no punctuation to break it up.
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~deadlypoison695 Nov 28, 2004, 10:20:38 AM
Oops... yea... the lack of punctuation would be my genius fault -sigh- must remember to fix that O.o

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:blackrose:
Can't you see that sometimes I need to be bothered? That sometimes I push you away, hoping that you'll care enough to come back and try again?
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~taintedworld12 Nov 28, 2004, 10:20:56 AM
"While dancing with shadows on white painted walls"
i really like this, its my favorite out of the poem. sounds happy out of context

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"Outside in the distance a wildcat did growl,
Two riders were approaching, the wind began to howl."
-Bob Dylan
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~GilEressea Nov 28, 2004, 10:38:13 AM
I think this is really cool, hope you manage to finish it

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-=An Undying Shadow In A World Of Light=-
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~Lost-Faith Nov 28, 2004, 12:09:55 PM
I like this a lot, very eloquently written. I hope you find the inspiration to write on, I can't wait to read the whole thing

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Discover the boundaries of your imagination... then go beyond
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~SirNaelyan Nov 28, 2004, 7:25:26 PM
lol to me it sounds like u were listening to lacuna coil. I doubt you were but I had track 13 on repeat recently. Melikes this so far.

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--SirNaelyan
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~wukurd Nov 28, 2004, 9:55:09 PM
Good imagery.

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"So often the church has marched hand in hand with the military
Casting its blessings upon the writhing bodies of the battlefield
Each stab of a bayonet is God's word...
For he so loved the world he gave our only begotten sons."-Crass
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~MorningAfterHangover Nov 29, 2004, 9:38:48 AM
Nicely done, very interesting piece.

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-MoRnInG aFtEr HaNgOvEr-
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